Comment: i was just looking for a paper due today and i had to read all this it was sooo good
Comment: this is one brilliant essay i found in this website!
Comment: talk about best writing!
Comment: What are you talking about? The person lost me after the second sentence! This is an obvious attempt on the author’s part to flex his vocabulary muscle…what a waste.
Comment: very impressive
Comment: This wouldn’t get you into Texas Tech, let alone Stanford.
Comment: Good Essay. I like the “Legos” theme that the essay was built up around.
Comment: Legos are the basis of this essay. It’s all or nothing. If the admissions officer reading this essay thinks that playing with Legos is juvenile, you’ll be rejected. In addition, the word choice is awful. Some words are used in the wrong sense entirely, while others make you look pretentious. This is NOT the type of essay Stanford is looking for.
Comment: Who the hell talks about Legos in an college admissions essay?!
Comment: Very interesting, but i would like to see more detail within its structure. there is no paragraphs inside its main theme which should withhole the little odds and ends. it has flabbergasted my reading abliaty with its stupidy.
Comment: What the hell does crew have to do w/ legos?
Comment: NICE TRY. Sorry if that sounded too deprecating but i dont belive this essay deserves anything more than a three. Some flaws that are quite glaringly obvious include trying to force big words that sounded very akward and helped slow the flow of the essay. Another is the far-fetched try of relating how legos “shaped your life.” Legos are legos, they are toys, nothing more. I could see how they possibly teached you a lesson, but its hard to believe that they actually affected the students life as described. Overall its clear that this person spent a good amount of time on this essay, but I don’t believe this is the type of essay Stanford would like.
Comment: the whole thought of relating to your life on LEGOs is child like. Everyone that has read this is now more stupid. Thank you for wasting my time.